And thank you for your kind note - it's lovely to see this in its finished format, while still retaining all the things I loved about the first draft.
I love the feel of this. It's grubby and greasy and bereft - just like Mick. The sensation matches him.
That's a beautiful image, such a stark contrast to the light.lila wrote:deep inside the concrete and dirty glass.
Mick's dreams given voice - this is beautiful, lila, really beautiful.lila wrote:spilled words at dusk
I've always loved this description - along with the rest of that paragraph you give us a picture of Mick's careless desperation with so few words.lila wrote:to hide his hard skin
Oy, this is good. The pain of a thought. I can feel Beth floating through him, punishing him at every step. It doesn't matter that we don't know what's happened - we know it's bad.lila wrote:God, it hurt to even think her name.
I love this. And I'll finish with my usual, plaintive cry: more please...
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