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Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 5:48 pm
by MickLifeCrisis
Disclaiimer: I don't own Moonlight or any of its characters.
Characters: Mick and Beth
Rated G
ETA: Where are my manners? Thank you Moonlighter for letting me run this one by you!


Cold Heart


Beth had been trudging through knee-deep snow for the past mile. Now she stood at the crest of the hill looking down at the cabin. The lights shining out of the windows and the wisp of smoke curling up from the chimney were a warm invitation.

She shivered as the cold wind whipped around her and tucked her chin down into the collar of Mick’s coat. She had heard him say “you can’t” so loudly in her head that it drowned out “because I love you” hidden underneath. In a fit of fury she shouted words she now regretted as she grabbed the nearest coat off the hook by the door and stormed out into the snow. When she realized it was Mick’s coat her stubborn pride had refused to let her go back inside. Now his scent enveloped her like a warm blanket and she felt the icy fingers of anger that had gripped her heart melt away. He was only trying to protect her. She knew that just as surely as she knew he had already forgiven her and would be awaiting her return with a hot cup of cocoa.

Beth headed down the hill and Mick met her at the door.

“I’m sorry,” she said.

“I love you,” he replied.


The end.

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 5:57 pm
by redwinter101
Oh my!! This is just gorgeous, MLC. So true to character and so very evocative in such a short piece.

Wonderful. :clapping:

Red

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 6:25 pm
by cassysj
You have captured so much in so few words. I can see Beth through the whole thing.

Just lovely.

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 6:34 pm
by francis
:heart: :heart: :heart:
This is lovely. :happysigh:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 7:05 pm
by allegrita
Oh, what a sweet story. Lucky Beth, to snuggle up in that coat (even if she is mad). :laugh: And wearing that coat, how can she possibly stay mad? :happysigh: :happysigh:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 7:11 pm
by susieb
Short and sweet and perfect! I love it! :heart:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 7:45 pm
by MickLifeCrisis
Why, thank you everyone! :rose: I originally thought I could do this in a 100 word drabble. But sometimes the muse just grabs on and won't let go until all the words come out. And then she wouldn't let me cut it in half. :laugh:

ETA: Allegrita, have you been spying on Mick and Beth's cabin? Your holiday banner looks it came right from my story!

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Fri Dec 10, 2010 8:00 pm
by allegrita
Oh my gosh--you're right! Well, if anyone's been spying, it's VG99, because she made it... :snicker:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 4:50 am
by GuardianAngel
Lovely, MLC. I can see Beth up there, making a face, sighing, and returning to the cabin. She's quick to explode and saying hurtful things. But she can't resist that vamp. And I think Mick would forgive her just about anything.

This really hit the spot. Thank you.

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 5:13 am
by lorig
:cheer: Really good!! :thumbs:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 7:12 pm
by darkstarrising
MLC, this is soooo like what could happen. A happy interlude in the mountains, a lover's spat with Beth stomping off in the snow only to find the coldness in her heart warmed by Mick's love.

Lovely :hearts:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Sat Dec 11, 2010 8:23 pm
by fairytoes
That's so lovely MLC! :hearts: Thank you! :flowers:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Sun Dec 12, 2010 2:44 am
by one.zebra
We love it when the Muse grabs you! :hyper2:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 11:58 pm
by jen
What a deliciously warm story you have written here in answer to the challenge.

Beth only thought she grabbed the wrong coat.

She grabbed precisely the right one.

Yum!

Thanks

Jenna

:flowers: :hearts: :flowers: :hearts:

Re: Cold Heart (G) - "Cold" Challenge #124

Posted: Tue Dec 14, 2010 2:54 am
by MickLifeCrisis
Thank you again for such wonderful comments! :flowers: I'm always happy to hear that you think I get the characters right.

:wreath: