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Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:32 am
by redwinter101
Title: Home
Author: redwinter101
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: I don't own Moonlight or any of its characters
Note: I have about six other fics on the go and I can't finish any of them :(. Then, this came out of nowhere. Go figure.

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--- Home ---

The rolling hold of a troop transporter, seasickness and the greasy stench of hundreds of fear-filled bodies raising bile with every breath. A frozen trench in the Ardennes, surrounded by the dead, the dying and those who longed to be so. The house of glass: cage, prison, playground. Shabby rented apartments and down-at-heel office digs. I've laid my head down in all of them.

But now, here, as I watch her move with the rhythm of her dream, for the first time since I walked out of my mother's house a lifetime ago, I know I am home.

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:34 am
by wpgrace
Lovely and haunting, Red... and the coolest thing about it is... we kinda walked part of the way with him on this, so we can see exactly what he's remembering, and savoring.

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:37 am
by darkstarrising
O my Red,

Sometimes when the muse fails to cooperate, she offers up a gem like this! I, for one, thank her!!!

In a few words, you've conveyed a lifetime of experiences, from the safe haven of a childhood home, though the depths of fear and heartache, back to a place where love and comfort are found.

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:40 am
by redwinter101
grace, dsr, thanks for reading. Delighted you liked it :hearts: .

Red

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:45 am
by PNWgal
So beautifully haunting...

I LOVE this:
as I watch her move with the rhythm of her dream
Such a lovely turn of phrase.

Mick's definitely home.

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:49 am
by mitzie
I truly felt like you took me on a journey with this exquisite drabble! Heart wrenching, painful, yet uplifting!!!! :yahoo: :clapping: :clapping: :clapping: :eyes: :yahoo: :clapping: :thud: :notworthy: :rose: :heart:

mitzie

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 8:16 am
by redwinter101
PNWgal, :hug: that's lovely, thank you :).

mitzie, what a lovely comment. I'm so touched. Thank you :).

Red

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 8:26 am
by Kelly
Just beautiful, Red. Grace described it perfectly...it's haunting. I really loved it! :yes:

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 9:52 am
by redwinter101
Thanks, Kelly :heart:

Red

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 11:09 am
by wpgrace
redwinter101 wrote:The house of glass: cage, prison, playground.
I came in to read your comment and re read the drabble ('cause as long as I'm here I may as well entertain myself thoroughly, right?) and this line is really haunting... what an apt way to describe that marriage... shivvers!!


redwinter101 wrote:since I walked out of my mother's house a lifetime ago
And it finally occurred to me that this line is literal... he DID leave his Mama a literal lifetime ago, in the number of years and in the fact of being actually living. Shivvers again! I love those shivvers!

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 11:11 am
by francis
Redwinter, you did it again. You captured a lifetime (or more) of experiences and mostly pain in such a short piece. And Mick came full circle, from home to home. Wonderful, mesmerizing, sad and hopeful. Thank you so much.
I did something similar with China in Your Hands, but you used only so few words to convey Mick's feelings. Brilliant.

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 12:02 pm
by Phoenix
Beautiful, Red. :rose:

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 1:47 pm
by redwinter101
Grace, I love that you got the shivers :)

francis, Phoenix, thank you both so much :rose:

Red

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 2:44 pm
by seamus3333
Only a great writer can evoke so much with so few words. Monday morning starts with a lump in my throat. Seamus

Re: Home (Mick, PG)

Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 10:35 pm
by redwinter101
:wave: :wave:

*waves to Seamus*

Thanks so much - as always, you make me :blushing: .

Red