Page 1 of 3

Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 4:38 pm
by starbucksjunkie
This is in response to a challenge from Eris from another board; she asked for "sensuality over sexuality." It wouldn't leave my head. This one has a bit of a twist, though.

PG-13 for mild sensuality.

Disclaimer: Moonlight and its original characters belong to those who created and produced it; not me. I own my plot and any original characters.

Thanks to PNWGal, my fabulous beta. And to Eris for giving us the challenge.




Feed


He came toward her silently in the dark, and when he sat on the bed and laid his hand on her warm cheek, she rolled over with a grunt and a sleepy sigh.

He stroked her hair and rubbed her back, gently encouraging her into position. She sat up and pushed herself up the bed to prepare.

Soft noises split the dark and her liquid began to flow, dripping down her bare chest as she pushed herself against the pillows. As her breasts continued to glisten and drip, she sighed, reaching, arranging, settling. Caressing.

Two snuffling cries, then silence to human ears. But he could hear it. The kneading. The shudder. The sigh.

And more sounds filled him. A joyous triple rhythm: her heartbeat, his, the infinitesimal “eh” between gulps.

As the rhythm of those tiny motions took hold, she closed her eyes, began to doze.

His eyes silvered, the better to see them in the dark. He gazed at the blue veins crisscrossing her breast, all pointing to the place where the tiny body joined hers. Long moments he watched, until the tiny body, too, stilled.

He eased them apart and shouldered his burden, rubbing and patting and smelling until he heard what he was waiting for.

He came toward her again, his cool hands helping. More reaching, rooting, soothing, sighing. He very carefully caressed the ointment onto her swollen flesh. She whimpered. He reached for her hand.

He knew the magic of this moment had abated some for her, diluted by exhaustion, repetition, pain, and the smell of her own fluids.

But not for him.

She lay her head back on the headboard and inhaled, exhaled, closed her eyes. Again he watched and touched and listened.

After awhile he relieved her of her charge and again began to pat and caress. A hearty burp elicited a chuckle. She yawned and nestled back into the covers.

He bent down and kissed her slowly, fervently, then carried the tiny body back through the darkness for its own rest.

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 4:44 pm
by redwinter101
Gah. I am at work. I have no time to read. But I saw this on active topics and just had to pop in to say how very excited I am to see a new story from you (and to see it posted here :) ).

I will savour when I get home tonight...

Red

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 5:20 pm
by francis
Really a twist. But I got it at "tiny body". :lol:
Well done. So Mick is a breast man, huh?

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 5:26 pm
by Lilly
SBJ -- I'm struggling to find the right words here. This piece is purely delightful, and literally evoked a memory wrapped in a pleasant shiver as I got to the fourth paragraph. You have captured the tenderness and wonder of this feeding so beautifully, and yet so realistically. One is just hungry, one is in awe and one is exhausted but guided by unfailing instinct and love. You've painted the picture here with a light touch and the finished product is lovely. What a unique twist on the challenge.

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 5:48 pm
by wpgrace
OMG... what a magical little moment... and how incredibly sweetly told!

SO delighted to see you writing something... and you did your usual amazing job.

Thanks for posting this here... it is memorable, honey... truly is.

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 5:49 pm
by allegrita
SBJ, that is lovely. There is no relationship like that of loving mother, father and nursing child. None. This could be any happy family, except of course, that we can follow the clues and know which one it probably is. No need to ask questions though...just enjoying this beautiful, sensual, loving vignette.

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 7:08 pm
by PNWgal
First...I want to tell you how incredibly THRILLED I am that you posted this!!

*happy dance*

This is such a loving yet practical portrait of a middle-of-the-night feeding. The moment still holds its magic for the observer, yet for the participant, it's an exhausting yet exhilarating experience.

Just lovely, my friend. Very well done. :)

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 8:05 pm
by GuardianAngel
*Happy sigh* I just about devoured this. I had to read it twice.

I had a suspicion of where it was going and knew I was right when I got to:
His eyes silvered, the better to see them in the dark. He gazed at the blue veins crisscrossing her breast, all pointing to the place where the tiny body joined hers. Long moments he watched, until the tiny body, too, stilled.
It was 'the tiny body' that did it for me.

This was realistic and, I think, all the sweeter for it.

I don't think I can express how delighted I am that you're writing and posting, sbj. :)

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 8:15 pm
by starbucksjunkie
Thanks, y'all. It means a great deal to know you're still reading.

Some of you might recognize yourselves in this one. As Lilly notes, it brings back memories.

The wonder, the exhaustion, the awe, the stench. Pretty much sums up the first six months of motherhood, don't you think? :)

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 8:19 pm
by lorig
Sure does, and I did it back to back. My kids are 11 months and 3 weeks apart. :o :shock:

Beautifuly written. Your writing is remarkable!!

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 9:45 pm
by coco
sbj this was just lovely. Such a twist to the challenge :D

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 10:59 pm
by Fleur de Lisa
First of all let me SQUEEE like a fan girl: SBJ is here!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!

Ahem. Back to the composed, dignified woman I am. (I can hear you people laughing; not nice)

Lovely story. The best part of this is how most of us are able to tie ourselves into the emotions of this scene, which makes it all the more personal. Mick watching the feeding, must have been such a powerful moment for him. A true dream come true.

As is having you here.

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 11:32 pm
by redwinter101
So I finally have time to read and savour. Right from an opening of instant scene-setting, you give us a scene of such tenderness, tiredness, intimacy and just plain joy that it brought a tear to my eye.
starbucksjunkie wrote:And more sounds filled him. A joyous triple rhythm: her heartbeat, his, the infinitesimal “eh” between gulps.
Oh that's lovely.
starbucksjunkie wrote:His eyes silvered, the better to see them in the dark.
Such a telling phrase - no matter how often he witnesses this, it will always be a miracle and he cannot bear to miss a single moment - even as he recognises the exhaustion, irritation and tribulation of what he witnesses.
starbucksjunkie wrote:He very carefully caressed the ointment onto her swollen flesh. She whimpered. He reached for her hand.
That is just a wondrous image - so intimate, in a way that isn't sexual but is still incredibly sensual. Challenge well and truly met.

This is marvellous, sbj. Marvellous.

Red

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 11:46 pm
by redwinter101
And, Lisa...
Fleur de Lisa wrote:(I can hear you people laughing; not nice)
that would be me.

Red

Re: Feed -- One shot (PG-13)

Posted: Tue Jan 27, 2009 11:58 pm
by mitzie
I have never read any of your writing. This was absolutely beautiful and realistic! I loved it!! Very creative twist on the challenge. Excellent!! I look forward to reading more of your stories, you've got another fan here!!!! :mrgreen:

mitzie