Beautiful. I had a very real, physical reaction to that sentence - I felt it to the tips of my toes.But this was real and hard and hot and suffocating.
Now I wonder if Mick will be happy or not with the decision. True - in the original storyline it is Mick himself that asks Josef to Turn him, but it was so that he could save Beth. In yours, he didn't need to be a vampire to save Beth. A very human Mick accomplished it. So now does he regret his friend 'saving' him when it's not necessary, now that Beth is safe? Or does he relish the chance to spend more time on earth with the woman and friend he loves?
I can't wait to read on and find out.