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Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Fri Oct 28, 2011 8:50 pm
by jen
Lucky

This was fabulous!!!

Totally agree that Beth probably has multiple stories in her past that never entirely made sense. Close calls that somehow she managed to survive more or less unscathed.

She played a major role in Mick's life, whether she was aware of it or not. I imagine that she kept him busy.

If only her mom knew that she had her own personal fanged protector, hiding just out of sight!

Thank you!

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2011 7:39 pm
by darkstarrising
Definitely :scary: time. You had my heart thumping along with Beth's....she knew better than to go into the woods after dark, but she did it anyway. This, in particular had me shaking
“Go ahead and scream,” Metallica panted, shoving her closer to his buddies. “No one’s gonna hear you.”
Good thing her guardian angel is always close by....
For now, there was still a scent of blood in the air, and that was his business, wasn’t it? Blood.
Methinks those three thugs had a few more lessons to learn that night, ones they'll never forget.

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Mon Oct 31, 2011 7:45 pm
by librarian_7
Thanks, fairytoes! It's always hard from the "inside" to know if a story is funny, or scary, or suspenseful...or whatever you're aiming at. And that's what makes the feedback so great...it lets you know if you hit the mark!

jen, yes, I think Beth Turner had to have given that poor guardian angel of hers quite the workout. :teeth: I'd like to write more stories in that *ahem* vein, as time goes on. We can't have Mick getting bored, now, can we?

dsr--I have my doubts about whether or not those three slimeballs are ever going to make it OUT of the woods. But one way or another, they're definitely in for an unpleasant night.

Lucky

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Mon Oct 31, 2011 8:36 pm
by allegrita
Let's put it this way... they definitely made an error in judgment, picking on that particular high-school girl that night. :whistle:

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Tue Jun 25, 2013 3:18 am
by cassysj
This was really a terrifying tale because the danger is part of the natural world but it was the supernatural that saved her yet again. Beth kept her guardian angel very busy.

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Tue Jun 25, 2013 4:15 am
by BlueEyedMonster
Beth always a trouble magnet and never ever stays in the car. This story has a nice scary pace to it gave me a few goose bumps reading it.

So happy when "new" stories come up in active topics :hyper2:

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Wed Jun 26, 2013 6:39 am
by librarian_7
I know I've said it before, but it always tickles me when I see new comments on any of my stories. Thank you so much!

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Wed Jun 26, 2013 10:25 pm
by MickLifeCrisis
Enjoyed the reread! I could just hear the twigs snapping and the leaves rustling and Beth's heart pounding.

:chair:

Re: The Short Cut (Challenge #132) --PG-13

Posted: Wed Jun 26, 2013 11:12 pm
by allegrita
Wonderfully creepy. :chair: :bat: How fun to be reading scary stories in June! :teeth: