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Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Tue Apr 14, 2009 2:52 pm
by dreamcatcher
What can I say? but every line was just..... perfection! One of the very best!

Thanks to you 'that gives' and Rijane 'that takes' and the rest of us can share in the pleasure!

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Tue Apr 14, 2009 4:56 pm
by starbucksjunkie
Truly, truly a sacred moment, captured by a master.

This is beyond gorgeous, red. There is a reverence and grace that is preserved here, and that is what makes it so special.
We begin here.
Yes, perfect.

Happy Birthday, ri.

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Tue Apr 14, 2009 5:30 pm
by coco
Oh Red that was so lovely. What a wonderful gift for rijane on her birthday.
Resting my face to yours, I feel your tears and I know. This is the end of fear, the end of regret, the end of alone.

We begin here.
The whole story is just so very lovely :hearts:

I'll have a smile on my face for the rest of the evening now after reading that. ;)

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Tue Apr 14, 2009 11:24 pm
by redwinter101
seamus, Cat, "beautiful" is indeed the highest compliment. Thank you both. :rose:

dreamcatcher, how lovely! Thank you.

sbj, you're doing that "making me blush" thing again. Grace was what I was striving for - I love that you found it here.

coco,
coco wrote:I'll have a smile on my face for the rest of the evening now after reading that.
As will I after reading that.

Red

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 7:20 pm
by redwinter101
*shameless bump*

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 8:38 pm
by darlingcat
I am so glad you brought the story back and that it caught my attention.
Wonderful writing, so emotional and powerful :rose:

And btw, any news on updating Afterglow? I am hooked.

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Thu Apr 16, 2009 9:26 pm
by redwinter101
Thanks, dc.

Re Afterglow - I'm working on it (it's only just over a week since the last update!). I need to finish both final chapters before I can post 11 so it might be a while. But it will go up as soon as possible.

Red

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Fri Apr 17, 2009 5:40 am
by janicevictoria
Red!! Gasps....WOW!! That was... :thud: What beautiful poetry you weave. I just love your one shots. I especially loved this line
I've taken my fill. For the first time in this life, I hunger no more.

Oh, and Happy Birthday Rijane :bdayball:

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Fri Apr 17, 2009 8:18 am
by bank1115
Red, once again I bow to the master! :notworthy: This was stunning. So much emotion I feel spent but I've read it 3 times now-LOL Lucky, lucky us that ri got older! :snicker: kays ps. my birthday is in Nov. if you've nothing to do or need inspiration.

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Fri Apr 17, 2009 8:46 am
by francis
This story is so bursting with imagery. I love the choice of words.
unpicked my seams
I am new. I'm a child taking the first steps of discovery. I imagined. I dreamt. But I never really believed, until now.
you strip away the cloak of regret that has protected me
hum your name against your skin, each time new and sacred. The voice of ages cries inside me, forcing tears past the silver that can no longer contain them. I don't need to turn away, not now, not ever.
Such a richness of words, of emotions in such a few words. It’s as if you were in Mick’s head.

And then the sensual careful description of their love, with „Like this“ slaying me again. It’s the ultimate counterpoint to the bathroom in Fever, intimacy, giving and accepting life, being connected on a deep level.
For the first time in this life, I hunger no more.
Wow. This is touching on every level of humanity. Everything a person could ever want has been fulfilled. The epitome of heaven.

And the last two lines kill me again.
Resting my face to yours, I feel your tears and I know. This is the end of fear, the end of regret, the end of alone.

We begin here.
This one is going to be printed out. It’s a masterpiece.

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Fri Apr 17, 2009 10:36 pm
by redwinter101
jv, thanks so much. This one's been rattling round my brain for months so it was a huge relief to finally get it down on paper.

kays, I hoped you'd like this :rose: . Just let me know the date in November and I'll see what I can do :).

francis, :blushing: :blushing: um, wow. I'm a bit lost for words at such high praise. So I'll just say thank you - thank you.

Red

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Mon Apr 27, 2009 8:34 pm
by Albra
I'm speechless... I'm touched... I'm weeping with emotion... (and it is not my usual reaction...)
:notworthy: :thanks: :notworthy: :thanks: :notworthy: :thanks:

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Mon Apr 27, 2009 9:46 pm
by redwinter101
Oh, Albra, sweetie, thank you. I'm so touched.

:heart: :heart:

Red

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 10:08 pm
by jen
What can I say? but every line was just..... perfection! One of the very best!

Re: The Quality of Mercy (M/B, PG-13) for rijane

Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 10:25 pm
by darkstarrising
Red,

Others have said it, but it bears repeating...this is perfect. The emotion, the rhythm, the release of each to the other. Together, they banish fear. Together, they find love. What a wonderful gift you gave Ri and all of us. :rose: